I lean out the door with my dog, I walk until I can’t see my house anymore. Today I am going to go to my secret spot. I creep into a foggy forest and let my dog off the lead but still keep a good eye on her. I feel the coarse tree with my finger tips and take in my surroundings, there is no one to be seen but I like it that way I like the silence. Then all of a sudden my dog is no where to be seen “Daisy!” I yell but she does not respond I call again “Daisy COME HERE!!” but still no response I start to panic. I look every where but then I see her running towards me “ hello you found me!” I tell her. I finally get home I see my Mum and Dad sitting on the couch with distressed looks on there face. They tell me how I have been missing for 3 hours and about how they thought I had been kidnapped. I tell them where I was. They tell me never to go in that forest again but I don't listen. The next day I go in the same forest but I tie a bright pink string to all the trees I see. I found my way out of the deep forest. Mum and Dad still don't know about my adventurers into the deep dark forest.
This is my writing from last week.
My goals for my writing are
1. Using more descriptive words.
2. Use better grammar.
This was my friends feed back on it.
1. It sounds really good because you use words other than just walk like you said I creep into a foggy forest
2. The grammar is really good and it all makes sense.
3. The next steps would be to read through It and make the last few lines more descriptive
